Week 5 Story: Return of Yerdua, Part 2
After hearing the description of the monster in the forest, the Warrior knew exactly what level of threat he was going up against, for he has conquered it before three years ago.
The Warrior replied: "Do not worry, Yee and Zy. I will gladly vanquish this disgusting and evil foe. I've done it before and I'll do it again with ease. However, I must ask of something in return. The past couple of years in the kingdoms above have been terribly lonesome. And for that, I must request that you give me your daughter's hand in marriage."
"I will happily hand over my daughter's hand in marriage for you, O Protector of the Forest," Yee happily answered the Warrior, "but only if you rid the world of the evil that's in the Forest!"
And with that, with the help of the heavens, the daughter was transformed into a diamond-encrusted sword in its sheath beside the Warrior's waist.
"Thank you all. With the help of your daughter, I will surely make sure this monster will never cause tragedy to you and any other family ever again."
The Warrior then summoned eight tubs of perfume; but not just any perfume, it was all Chanel Grand Extrait. This particular odor was something the monster could not resist. And so he waited. Hours became days. Days became weeks. And at the mark of exactly one month, the monster finally showed face.
Yerdua dragged her massive, disgusting body down the Forest trail and towards the trap that the Warrior had set up. It immediately wrapped its body against the tubs of perfume, soaking in it for pleasure. And after has been overwhelmed by the aroma, the Warrior knew it was the perfect time to attack.
The Warrior unsheathed his sword and rushed at the monster. Yerdua was so focused and overwhelmed by the aroma that all her other senses had gone numb. She did not see nor hear the Warrior dashing towards her with immense speed.
Then, the warrior jumped and unleashed his diamond-encrusted sword upon the dazed creature and a million pieces were flew up in the air. Her green blood filled the trail and immediately dissipated into thin air. It was over, the monster was no more. Yerdua will never pose herself as a threat to the forest or any of the surrounding villages ever again.
The Warrior then returned the diamond-encrusted blade back into the beautiful maiden whom the was promised marriage. The two were celebrated and returned back to the heavens, continuing their protection over the Forest.
Author's Note: This story was a continuation of my last story, which was a derivative of Heavenly Beings: Susanoo and Orochi by E. W. Champney and F. Champney. When I last left off, the couple had just described the monster to the Warrior, which reminded him of the faithful battle with the same being three years prior. Upon hearing this, the Warrior asked in return for the couple's daughter's hand in marriage, for which they agreed. In the original story, the plot was similar in that the Susanoo also requested the daughter's hand in marriage as a deal for killing the monster. In this story, the Warrior baited the monster with tubs of perfume, which was the monster's weakness. This was in a similar fashion to the original story, where Susanoo used sake to intoxicate the monster before killing it.
I love how you made a part two to a previous story! This is really cool because it is almost like you are writing a short book with chapters and also gives you the ability to leave stories off with a cliffhanger that you can continue in the next week. I also really enjoyed reading a good fight story between the warrior and the monster. I found it really funny and cool that the warrior trapped the monster by using perfume. Not very often do you see that in writing where a women's product to improve smell is used to trap a vicious forest monster. I loved the creativity in this story and you have done a fantastic job with it. You use a lot of very descriptive words in your writing and I really appreciate it because it makes the story just that much more interesting. Overall, great work and I look forward to reading more of these stories in the future.
ReplyDeleteHi Long, This makes me want to go back and read the first part of the story! This was an interesting retelling but your imagery made it so great to read. Everything was there to really help me envision it and the details were awesome. I liked the change of sake to perfume because smells can be so strong that it alters the other senses. I really enjoyed this!
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