The Dead Mother
In a village, long ago, there was a wonderful couple living in a small house. Everything was well; they were all loved. Until one day, the lady of the house bore a child. However, the mother died suddenly after childbirth.
The husband cried for weeks. What is he to do now?
He notices something strange. The baby would cry day in, day out, but would sleep peacefully at night. Alone. As if it was suckled!
He decided to stay up one night to see what was going on in the middle of the night.
That night, he heard something or someone opens the door to the baby's room.
He walked silently to the room.
Tip. Tap. Tip. Tap.
In the room, he didn't believe what he saw. It was the dead mother, in the same clothes that she was buried in, kneeling over the cradle and tendering for the baby.
The next day, it happened again. Day by day, he would invite more people over to witness this miracle.
Until on the 10th day, the child died in its sleep.
The village was never visited by the dead mother again.
Author's Note: The story was based on "The Dead Mother" from Russian Fairy Tales by W. R. S. Ralston. In the creation of this story, I wanted to create a sense of suspense in the short and choppy sentences that I presented. There was also an inclusion of sounds that seemingly added a sense of suspense to the story, which is supposedly horror in the genre.
Hey Long, I actually retold this story as well for week 14! I really admired your sentence structure. I'm an avid horror and thriller writer and I definitely felt the suspense you were aiming for. Another part of your story that stood out was the onomatopoeias. Using those really captures the reader into your story and makes them pay attention. Great work, hope your exams go well!
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